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Lost One
22 February 2009, 02:33 AM
Counter clock-wise.
My life spins backward.
Spirraling down.
I'm heading toward.

The doom I knew I'd one day meet,
But prayed that day would be so sweet.

I'm stuck to realize.
My life unravels.
It moves around.
But never travels.

Not forward but behind me,
Forcing me to never see.

Counter clock-wise.
Then I hit the ground.
I'm screaming out.
Do you hear the sound?

I'm stuck to realize.
There is nothing here.
I ask you for hope.
Instead I get fear.

A cool breeze sliding through the air.
Swaying through the wind without a care.
Swishing away the pain I feel.
This life I live does not seem real.

Counter clock-wise.
But who fixed the clock?
Forwards not backwords.
I can hear it tock.

I'm stuck to realize.
But suddenly I'm free.
Who took away my chains?
They let me finally be.


Poem 15/?? in series

This is kinda long, sorry. I wanted to know what other people thought because I think it is pretty bad. Thank you.

tobymacfreak
22 February 2009, 03:45 AM
How can you think that is bad? I swear I am not just saying this, but I love it.
It made me think, and I love the way it was written. Nice job.
10\10

drew618
22 February 2009, 04:17 AM
This was great, 10/10.

You follow the same lines of poetry as I do, and I couldn't of put this any better. Nice job.