Joshx2
24 April 2008, 04:28 PM
I use to do poetry when I was younger (around 14-15) I quit at my late 15s. Heres a hate/break up poem (Well something among those lines) I wrote about 3 years ago in 2005. I am surprised I still have it. I just feel like posting about it ( Since I am INCREDIBLY bored right now ). So here it is:
What have you done?
A black cloud of betrayal as affections disappear.
Once we tasted paradise,
Hand in hand and untainted,
But your love died.
A sickening fever of hatred -
Tears follow pain, follow death,
Love condemned.
In a rush of sorrow,
I hate you.
I know it doesn't rhyme much, all poems aren't meant to rhyme. It's pretty lame. It's kind of a break up poem. The ending is pretty straight forward, its just "I Hate You. Period." lol. Sorry for posting this, I was incredibly bored.
**I haven't been on these forums for ages. I've kind of lost my forum hand(My Thread Making touch and Posting touch) . So yeah I'm trying to get in the hang of making threads again =].
This Poem needs a title. I made it 3 years ago, but NEVER thought of a title, any suggestions?
What have you done?
A black cloud of betrayal as affections disappear.
Once we tasted paradise,
Hand in hand and untainted,
But your love died.
A sickening fever of hatred -
Tears follow pain, follow death,
Love condemned.
In a rush of sorrow,
I hate you.
I know it doesn't rhyme much, all poems aren't meant to rhyme. It's pretty lame. It's kind of a break up poem. The ending is pretty straight forward, its just "I Hate You. Period." lol. Sorry for posting this, I was incredibly bored.
**I haven't been on these forums for ages. I've kind of lost my forum hand(My Thread Making touch and Posting touch) . So yeah I'm trying to get in the hang of making threads again =].
This Poem needs a title. I made it 3 years ago, but NEVER thought of a title, any suggestions?