...Freebee's Poetry...

[Freebee93]

Well like REVENGE i am posting a thread for my poetry, enjoy

Bright as air
You were there
When we saw that dark flare
It laughed and it screamed
Like it made us defeat
Then we saw
It had no eyes at all
Then my eye shut
When it opened a man was saying, but....
A clear voice with a horrible ting
It said Staren! How you fail to bring me the magic wing?
Try again to bring me it
So i can make darkness bit by bit
Then something warm shook me from my sleep
A warm hand on my cheek
You said, Levere?
While i felt hurt to very severe
With me lying on a hospital bed
Are you alright? You said
I blinked and saw
The nightmare had not happened after all!

Your Hand felt cold
Your hand was cold
I knew what that told
Weeping at your feet
Your eyes white from defeat
They tried to make me leave
But i knew i had a message to receive
A faint whisper foretold
That i was bold
As i see
You wish to have died with me
It said
Then i felt a rush of air by your deathbed
You rose almost like alive
All you said, was goodbye

Crumble
Lives ready to crumble
People hearing a rumble
Fires killing
Tax collectors billing
Scary men
One named Ben
Goodbye Earth
You are no longer worth

Evil men arunning
Men arunning
Sons of Cunning
being cruel dying in duel
killing for the pleasure
or the treasure
take a rest
wish you the best
death await
If so soon i will meet you at the gate

The Black Knight
The Black knight searches for me
and kills all thee who defend for me
my heart pumping
the ground thumping
shimmer the star
soon i will leave and go yet far
Goodbye forever
Goodbye we will meet again never

The scare
The scare erupted
A scream was heard
a figure merged from the dark
its was horrible, the trees almost lost there bark
black as the ink in a book
yet white as a hook
the figured floated to me and said,
Begone! your loved one is... dead

Spun Gold
You've spun gold
As i was foretold
People kill for it
Collecting every last bit
Not be vain
And give my family shame,
How do you do it?
Do you do it with a candle lit?
What material do you use
Please tell me that and some news

Fake Love
Fall upon young
Hold your tongue
young love
almost like a dove
It comes fast
before you know it, its in the past.

Travel
Barrels roll
I paid the toll
Upon horse
On a cruel course
Also on feet
You go through wind snow rain and sleet
Food is gone
Finally travel is done

[kogeck]

I think you're a wonderful poet, and I expect great things from you. ;)
Your Hand Felt Cold is amazing.

[Freebee93]

Thanks kogeck i'm think of getting some college and a steady job then writing a book of this stuff in my future.

Spun Gold
You've spun gold
As i was foretold
People kill for it
Collecting every last bit
Not be vain
And give my family shame,
How do you do it?
Do you do it with a candle lit?
What material do you use
Please tell me that and some news

[REVENGE]

Very interesting poems, I like them. :] Keep writing.

[Freebee93]

Fake Love
Fall upon young
Hold your tongue
young love
almost like a dove
It comes fast
before you know it, its in the past.

Travel
Barrels roll
I paid the toll
Upon horse
On a cruel course
Also on feet
You go through wind snow rain and sleet
Food is gone
Finally travel is done

[Freebee93]

The Luck
You barely reached the islands shore
Before you knew it you were standing on gold floor
A maiden waiting on you
Doing anything you ask her to
Eating a feast
In the far east
Tonight you have duck
What luck

[REVENGE]

May I ask what these poems are meant to portray? What they mean? I'm afraid I just can't seem to understand them... the way the words are put together I can't make sense of it.

[Poetic]

I find that meaining should take precidence over rhyming and meter (syncopation).

Off Topic: LinZ...Come to xat!

[Freebee93]

Sorry if it seemed confusing. :(

The new one was supposed to say incredible luck.
I explain it
your on a ship and it sinks.
you somehow get to an island shore
where a rich family finds you.

[Freebee93]

New

I will not tell
Strap me to a bed
Hold a price above my head
Smack me with a stick
Hit my head with a brick
I will not tell
You can make my family unwell
No secret will you hear
Even if you dunk me in beer
Stab my eye
Make my love die
No secret will be foretold
Make my mothers hand cold
Everything i will bear
At you i will continue to stare
Make the soldiers come for me
Threaten to strip me to a raft at sea
I will not tell
Even if I fell
If I fall at your mercy be
No secret will you see
To the man
Of which I can get my food can
I protect his word
I telling you is absurd
You will not get this secret note
Of which the king has wrote

Story behind the poem
Last night i dreamed i was in a country long ago in war i had to bring a message to a war general for the king. I had a person chasing me from the other country trying to get me to him the word, and that person in this poem is you.