The story of the missing penguin

[flubby10]

The Missing penguin
One day a young penguin named billy was walking down the road when a scream from the pizza parlor came out. He ran as fast as he can and no one was there. He went up to his sister the next day and said what are ur plans for today. She said 'i will probobally go to the dance club. Oh ok billy said. He went to the coffee shop for some delicious coffee, after that he went to check on his sister Jamie. She had dissapeared from the dance club what would he tell mom and dad. Find out on the next chapter of the missing penguin.

Please rate 1/10 and post any spelling errors

[hihellobi]

i liked your story 4/5 make it longer next time

[Soccer614]

2/10 I didn't really like it. It's way too short, and there is no punctuation.

Edit: :O March 5, 2007! Wow! I didn't know this was this old!

[Game Lord]

I didn't much like your story - their was an utter lack of punctuation, events occured without any depth at all, there was no atmosphere and you allow nothing to build up. Only the fact that if you fleshed your story out it would have the potential to gain a 6/10 means that I would rate it 0.5/10 instead of 0/10. I'm afraid I can't rate as high as 1/10 for this.

i liked your story 4/5 make it longer next time

I think this post has the record for the Miniclip Club Penguin Forum's biggest ever bump (1 and a half years) - this is one of the oldest topics on the entire forum!

Yours sincerely,
Game Lord