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zmactarheel
28 December 2007, 08:05 PM
It has no name, but it has a good topic for me to work with. So here it is, my untitled, new story.

Due to the fact that I Am Legend has come out, I must say this. It is based a TINY bit off of that, but mostly about the date 12/23/12 when the world is supposedly going to end. These are the events that play out.

He awoke two hours before the alarm clock was supposed to go off, not knowing why he did he just brushed it off and went into the kitchen to get himself a drink. When he entered the kitchen he realized that there was an eerie cold in the air. He checked all the windows, and doors but none of them were ajar. What’s going on, why is it so cold? He thought to himself. When he had gotten his drink he walked into his room, and decided to watch some television. “Good morning it’s 5:30AM on December 23rd,2012.” The announcer said on the news. It’s “that” day everyone was talking about he thought to himself. When he went in to work, he felt the tension in the air. Everyone knew, it wasn’t just him.
He didn’t care to think about it, he knew it was all a hoax and thinking about it enraged him. The factory shut down early that day, the owner said “It’s so our workers can be with their families on this last day.” He went to his friend’s house, “Surely, if anyone would know what really was going to happen this day, it was him” he said to himself. There was a note stuck in the door, he picked it up, it read:
To whom it may concern.

We have evacuated to the launch site for the ship out of here. If you have not been keeping up, the ship is for the near by planet that is an exact copy of earth. This was discovered two days after the projected path of that horrible thing coming at us was released. They have found a good route to avoid it, and those of us that are on it will be leaving by 7:30 PM. We urge EVERYONE to come and try to get in.

Sincerely,
The Andrews.

“BLANK” he said with a loud yell. “Those media jerks have gotten to them too!” This was stretching too far, he had to find someone with some sense. He drove all over the originally happy, and joyful street that he lived on, striving to find someone… someone that hadn’t bought into the crap the media was putting into our brains. He kept driving until he saw the launch site for the ship that everyone was going to ride up on. There were ships in every state, and in every country all over the world with the same course. To Planet E.
He looked at the clock in his car, it read 6:30 PM. They should be leaving soon. A few years before this, he had met a woman that he loved. They got married, and had a child. One year before this crap was released onto the streets, into our televisions, and even our papers. It was 2009, February 18th to be exact. The day that ALL analog television signals were taken, and only HD TV’s could watch. She said to him “I don’t like the change over, I don’t have a good feeling about it.” she said to him with a worried look on her face. “I don’t feel good about it either” was his reply. Three days later the scientists that were in charge of the HD satellites found something strange that disturbed them. The new signals were acting as magnets, reacting with the metal in the meteors around Earth. There were only small ones, but they noticed a giant, black dot on the radar. It was another meteor. All the trash, and metal particles that were released whenever we had an expedition in space had created an outer casing on the meteor that had made it a giant ball of metal.
This was the day that sparked all the chaos. People were committing suicide, killing others, robbing banks, etc. Michael’s wife was walking around in the grocery store, with their son, when one of those suicidal blank walked in with a bomb attached to his chest and blew it up. When he had heard about it, this made him hate the government and all of the television company owners. He thought it was all a lie to get people to buy HD TV’s and keep up with it.
He looked at the clock again, the time was now 6:59 PM. He watched the rocket fire up their engines, knowing that he would never see anyone he knew again. They began lift off right as the clock struck 7. He saw them lift into the air, and saw every other rocket as well. When they had broken the atmosphere, he noticed that the sky was darker than usual, and went to a nearby lab, and looked in the telescope. He saw that the rocket’s were going smoothly until…. Until he saw the explosions on the outer shell of the meteor.
“No, no… It can’t be… it was all a lie, made up for people to….” he stopped in mid sentence. Realizing the stupidity of his thoughts. Something made him look again though, he didn’t know what though. When he looked again, he noticed that the meteor he had thought was moving towards them, was actually moving sideways across the sky, sort of being drawn into every satellite now holding the HD rays. He saw the explosions of the satellite’s and saw the blob begin moving away. He was now all alone, in this sad excuse for a world. No one to talk to, no one to see, nothing. He walked around aimlessly for hours, until the designated time for the meteor. It was nowhere in site. He went home, and took out a few movies, huddling up close to the fire he had built. This was the beginning of a new world, and he was the leader.
He dedicated the next year to looking around the world trying desperately trying to find someone that wasn’t stupid enough to believe the government. He thought about how the government had gone down, and how everything had gone down the tubes. He thought about the day that it all happened. It was a bright and sunny Friday, everyone was happy, talking to each other asking how everyone was, when it happened. The president was shot. The Vice President had to take office, since she had lost by only one vote, his vote, Hilary Clinton was now in office. There was no need to go on now.
Two days after the fiasco, Christmas day, he set out on a journey. Looking from town to town for people. He was also looking for a dog, a cat, anything to keep him company. He stopped in Pittsburgh, PA after looking for days in the states around this one. He walked into a store, to get some rations when he noticed a shadow of someone on the floor in front of him. He turned around just quickly enough to dodge a blow from a broom. He looked at the woman, as well as she looked at him. They just stood there for a second before she said “Who are you?” he didn’t reply. “ANSWER ME!” he finally relented and said “my name’s Michael Orrington.” “What is your business in here, anywhere around here really.” she said putting the broom down. “I was the only one near me that didn’t believe that it could happen.” he said with a sigh. “Me as well” was her reply. “I think we should search together, if we split up and met back somewhere, it would be of more use.

EDIT: If some parts don't go together, it's because I had to edit it. Some were unapropriate for the forums.

Freebee93
28 December 2007, 08:11 PM
its okay but please add more.

zmactarheel
28 December 2007, 08:13 PM
I know, like I said it's not finished. It will be much better. Just a question, how did you read it in 6 minutes?

Emma23456718
28 December 2007, 09:32 PM
WRITE MORE

i actually took the time to read it

!~Hi/2 o o 6~!
28 December 2007, 09:41 PM
The story is rushed.

Sounds a bit like "I am Legend". ;)

Freebee93
28 December 2007, 09:57 PM
I know, like I said it's not finished. It will be much better. Just a question, how did you read it in 6 minutes?

Sorry, I am a very fast reader.
In elementary when i read aloud to the class 99.9% of the time none understood me.:blush:

Dunya-14
28 December 2007, 10:01 PM
That's awesome.. It kinda scared me tho.. continue it.;)

zmactarheel
28 December 2007, 10:18 PM
The story is rushed.

Sounds a bit like "I am Legend". ;)

Loosely, it's more based off the "end of the world" on that date in 2012. I was sort of mocking it. Not really though.
That's awesome.. It kinda scared me tho.. continue it.;)

Thanks, I definately will.

x0x-katy-x0x
28 December 2007, 10:28 PM
i just joined for fun when i read this.i dont think i have
ever read such a creative...story? lol no really i think it was amazing!

zmactarheel
28 December 2007, 10:30 PM
i just joined for fun when i read this.i dont think i have
ever read such a creative...story? lol no really i think it was amazing!

Thank you. It's a hobby of mine to sometimes write things, although my work pales in comparision to Nirvana Girl's work.

Oceanside344
29 December 2007, 12:46 AM
It does have the same idea of "I am Legend", with him being the only person left and leaving to find another person, but it is overall pretty good.

NIRVANAGIRL
29 December 2007, 01:05 AM
I find it very creative and imaginative. I'm afraid I've not had the chance to see the movie, "I Am Legend" or even read the book, so I can't say if it's similar or not, but I would love to see where the story line goes. Just remember that the more writing you do, the more your words flow together and the more prominent your own creative style comes into play. If you're considering writing for a living, as I plan to, writing everyday or at least once or twice a week on a story you're excited about can make all the difference. I think sometimes it's good to be hard on yourself - as with me, nothing I ever write is good enough. I always strive to weave a better story together, word things differently, or spend planning time thinking of new creative ideas. Music is also a very good way to find ideas, I've discovered. :]

zmactarheel
29 December 2007, 03:41 AM
I find it very creative and imaginative. I'm afraid I've not had the chance to see the movie, "I Am Legend" or even read the book, so I can't say if it's similar or not, but I would love to see where the story line goes. Just remember that the more writing you do, the more your words flow together and the more prominent your own creative style comes into play. If you're considering writing for a living, as I plan to, writing everyday or at least once or twice a week on a story you're excited about can make all the difference. I think sometimes it's good to be hard on yourself - as with me, nothing I ever write is good enough. I always strive to weave a better story together, word things differently, or spend planning time thinking of new creative ideas. Music is also a very good way to find ideas, I've discovered. :]


Yes. I Am Legend is based on a virus hitting the earth, and a man being alone, but he finds someone. This was not what I was going for. I was going for the thing about 12/23/12, and what happens then. But I thank you for your time, and hope that one day I will be able to write as well as you do.

penguindude515
30 December 2007, 02:02 AM
It's pretty nice, but like Hockey said, it's rushed. It seems like one point after the other.