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Freebee93
28 November 2007, 12:13 AM
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Introduction
Angel's are girl who were born mortal, Who are given birth to by vain cruel parents often made to work wear rags or thrown out of the home forever. Mainly girls with angry parents because there child was not a boy.
If our god sees them in pain all time for 6 months and the parents comfort, he will send other angels down to take the child, then an angel ceremony will take place when the girl hides her body and legs forever on and gets her halo.
If she ever unwraps her hair from her legs and body she will lose her halo be mortal again and be sent back to her cruelful parents.
During time as an angel the girl has many duties a new angel could be busy helping older angels then they send messages to people on earth in unuasul ways...at last they are important and actually help god.
If an angel gives birth the child will be sent to Earth to live in an orphanage if the child is not taken in by the time she is ten she will become an angel and be with her mother.
Over the past few years there has been an evil Angel who could it be?...


If i get good rates i will move to Chapter one

Miki_Niki
07 December 2007, 02:13 AM
That seems like a pretty good story!Kinda like NIRVANAGIRL's stories!But her are better ;)

Dannyboy
08 December 2007, 05:25 AM
It is certainly of great effort, but could you please polish the magnifying glass just a tad? Quite frankly, I am lost in the actual description and overal signifigance of events such as "Recieving the Halo" and other related materal. If you could clarify these aspects, I'm sure this story would be great.

So far, for effort, 5/10.