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Topoftheline
10 March 2007, 12:36 AM
Intro: Topoftheline is a normal penguin, searching club Penguin through it's ins and outs. She loves to meet new friends, and play the game know as Club Penguin. But, one day, everything changed.

PART 1- How it Happened

Topoftheline logged on Club Penguin, searching for the new pin, and looking through the fantastic new catalog. She was just on her way out of the gift shop, when she saw something eerie in the sky. She dropped her bags, and ran for her life, it was a evil looking creature! Then, all the penguin heard his booming voice:"I am looking for the one..."

Topoftheline was never so scared. She stoof there, frozen, in fright. One penguin then said,"W-what h-ave you c-c-ome f-for?""THE ONE!",he boomed. "The one for what?" Another penguin said.
Then the evil creature said," I am coming for the one who will lead you, my people will attack in a week, and we want to see who will be the strongest." He looked around. "I'll take you on!" a penguin said. "HA!"His booming voice lifted the penguin up, and he fell down. "How about you..." he looked at Topoftheline. "Will you be these penguin's leader?"

"Umm...I...uh...."Topoftheline said in a shaky voice. "Ok then! It's settled. You have a week to practice before we wipe out your town. Good luck" Then, he left.

Everyone started to stare at Top, how was she going to defeat a army of those evil creatures?

Author Note: This is my first time making a series story on CP! Give me comments and suggestions! Thanks!

Spray
10 March 2007, 03:06 AM
Type more of it quick i want to continure reading so bad!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D

Topoftheline
10 March 2007, 01:35 PM
Thanks! I'll make the next one in a few days. :) ;)

Fuzzykiwie
10 March 2007, 02:39 PM
COOl need more words sorry so so so

914mgtj914
10 March 2007, 02:49 PM
nice story
try and make it more exciting maybe:O

Topoftheline
10 March 2007, 09:01 PM
It's only the first part. Trust me, it will be longer. ;) WAY longer...

Holagurrl25
11 March 2007, 12:36 AM
It's pretty good!
Maybe make a couple of more indents, it makes the reading easier. (well for me).
This story makes you want to read more!

Pikedog Riley
11 March 2007, 12:48 AM
It's okay, doesn't appeal to me that much.
Maybe you should make it slightly longer. :)

Edit: Oh, your Topoftheline,
It's been awhile.

TheRealJaMeS
11 March 2007, 11:43 AM
Haha nice little story there,

Good work

Topoftheline
11 March 2007, 04:18 PM
It's okay, doesn't appeal to me that much.
Maybe you should make it slightly longer. :)

Edit: Oh, your Topoftheline,
It's been awhile.


Like I said in my other post, It will be WAY longer.

And yea, where have you been? I haven't seen you since December! I thought you left.